Second and Third Content Paragraph (Exemplification Essay)
Before embarking on your journey to complete the last 2 content paragraphs, remember to refer to your outline, Introduction and 1st content paragraphs that you have written earlier in previous lessons. Happy writing!
posted by scorpioneo at 4:43 PM
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THE ADVANTAGES OF BEING THE ELDEST CHILD IN THE FAMILY
Second content paragraph:
On top of that, the person who is the eldest child in a family will get more freedom from their parents. Because of being the eldest child in a family, the child might be more independent and will stand on his two feet. This is because the parents will spend more time to look after other children who are younger. So, the eldest child will get more freedom compare to other children in the family.
Third content paragraph:
On the other hand, the other advantage of being the eldest child in the family is the child will get all the new things from their parents. Parents tend to give more attention to the first child in the family. It is an undeniable fact. Besides, parents will buy whatever things needed by the eldest child. This is one of the ways how parents show their love and cares towards their child.
It is a waste if the old things such as toys being dumped away just because of oldness. So, the eldest child will always be the one to get new things and try new things and the other children will be using the toys after being passed to them by the eldest child.
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12:25 PM
Title: The Disadvantage of Cigarette Smoking
In addition, cigarette smoking also brings many side effects on health. As we know, cigarette smoking is the main contributer to the lung cancer. Every year, many people die because of lung cancer as a result of smoking. Besides, smoker who are with yellow black tooth always leds to a bad impression on their apprearance.On the other hand, harmful substances that contain in cigarettes also can kill human's brain cell that slow down the functions. Pregnant women who indulge in cigarette smoking will bring bad influences on their baby too. In fact, not only the people who smoking will get all these side effects, but we as the outsider who absorb the second-hand smoke will also get the same influeces.
Finally,cigarette smoking raise social problem. Smokers are always less concentrate while studying or working than the non-smoker. These can decrease their efficiency on working or study. Nevertheless, cigarette smoking also contribute to air pollution due to the harmful substances contain in the cigarettes, this will make people around feel uncomfortable and difficult to breath. More than that,smoking will lead to drug abuse.Smokers may turn to drug when they found that they can't get enough satisfactory from cigarette anymore and this lead to another social problem.
12:51 PM
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12:52 PM
Title: the advantages of online education
Firstly, flexibility is one of the most appealing characties of online education. Online learning allows you to complete your coursework from your home, your office or anywhere at times that are convenient to you. Even in the middle of night you can log on and access to solutions unlike the traditional classroom system. Besides, some student need work to pay for the fees so they can’t go to school at full time. By taking online education, student can work at their own pace and according to their own schedules.
Next, online education is fast and speedy and save on our time . Unlike the traditional classroom system where the teachers used to take hours to check the answer sheets of students, here, the solution is available instantaneously. This program allows the student freedom from the nagging teachers who in classroom systems often used to criticize them. Besides, the program of online education solutions also saves on our time as we can access the solutions from the comfortable confines of home. We are not required to commute to the University to seek solution.
12:53 PM
In addition, we can organize a camp or campaign. The purpose to organize the camp or campaign is to inform the benefits of reading to the students. On the other hand, we have to encourage them to read and take it as habit or hobby. As we know, reading is the main key to success in our life, by reading, we can learn more things that we cannot learn from the text book. We gain more knowledge by reading newspaper, get more information by reading magazine and improve our languages by reading novel or story book. Its help us a lot in the future. For example, when we have an interview, we can state more points by using the information that we learn from the newspaper. Other than that, by reading newspaper, we can know more daily news. For example, there are many rape cases that happened in bukit beruang. By reading the newspaper, we get this information, so that we can avoid those cases such as do not walk alone at night or stay at home after 8pm. Besides, we can also invite some of the successful people to share their reading experiences to the students.
Finally, we can held the reading competition among the students which will let them become more active on reading. Besides that, we have to award the students that become the winner for the competition. We try to attract the students to join the competition by using the award. According to the research that done by the students in Multimedia University(MMU), they found that most of the students are influencing by the peer. For example, who have participation the reading competition may influence or encourage their friends to join it. It might be the easier way to encourage the others to read.
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12:48 AM
In addition, we can learn to care for each other. Another that, we will know to care our family members and friends . In the other hands, we can improve our relationship between us with roommate as best friend and know deeply between each other. Besides that we can learn how to improve pur skill in communicate with each others well. Besides that,roomate will always be the someone who we can share our problem.
At last, we also can learn how to having a new life with someone whose we don't know before. We also can learn how to accept the life style of others. Besides that, roommate also is whose can give us support and also is the one who can give us useful advices. Thus, having a roommate is got many benefit for us and we can havinga new life that we never try before.
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11:49 AM
scorpio
Very well written. Great example to look at.
Second content paragraph
In addition to the convenience of online shopping, consumers can compare product price and features to make better decision with less effort. Besides that, internet also provides decision aids that help you to make decision so that they can attract more online shoppers. Many choices of product on online shopping are confusing, but with interactive toolkit such as comparison matrix or also known as CM, allow consumers to compare different prices of one product offered by different vendors on the internet. Thus, the toolkit allows consumers to receive the best deal possible.
Third content paragraph
Lastly, we have no pressure to buy a product through online shopping. Online shopping benefits both the society and individuals. The society can save human resources when consumers browse through online instead of asking for assistance from vendors. Besides that, consumers are free from the pressure to buy from the vendors. They can choose to purchase any product that they wish instead of listening to the vendors advice. Moreover, we can spend more time to make wise purchase decisions without time limitation.
12:16 PM
lokisama
very well written (hopefully is original :)) however there doesn't seem to be any coherence and cohesion between your paragraphs. How would you rewrite this to make it flow better?
12:19 PM
Lokisama,
YOu have posted the same paragraph twice. Where is your third content paragraph?
12:20 PM
sham_mu7
Fantastically written! Hope it's original Sham....:o)
second content paragraph
Other than Austria, France also will be a very interesting place to visit during holidays.France,a country known for its rich cultural heritage, historic landmarks and tradition of art de vivre. France is bordered by four seas, each one different with its own unique resorts and particular ambiance. Besides that,france provides many choices of a beach vacation, such as the the famous sandy beach which located at the west side of France. France also known as the worlds most romantic country and has welcomed lovers for centuries. Eventually, France offers everything you need to indulge your passions. France also offers a elegant accomodations, such as there's about 20,000 hotels,inns, motels in France. Other than that, French cuisine also known as the worlds finest. Even the normal bread, cheese, wine are elevated to an art. Furthermore, there's a lot of shopping malls. Even, if you can only afford to window-shop the expensive and famous french couturies, you can still find affordable buys in department stores and outdoor kiosks.
Third content paragraph
Over forty-five million tourist visit Germany every year, making it one of the most visited countries in the world. Germany has some of the most beautiful scenery in Europe. Many people who visit this country are overhelmed by the breathtaking landscapes and scenery. There is so much to offer for those who choose to have a great vacation in this country. It is the ideal place for walking and enjoying some of the purest fresh air in the world.Germany also known as a country whose history is fraught with disaster, meaning that there's no one can think of Germany without thinking the atrocities that occured during the war. It aslo has many exciting cities that boast spectacular architecture and stunning skylines. This country will be the best choice for people who are waiting to explore Europe.
12:26 PM
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