Third Assignment
For the third assignment, i'm bringing in a topic that can cause some controversy. I am aware that there would be some of you who will not be able to accept this topic but I'm hoping that you keep an open mind about it. Here you are free to voice your opinions, regardless on which side of the fence you stand on. I would like to stress that this topic has been chosen as I personally feel that WE ALL need to widen our perspective on EVERYTHING and learn as much as the world can offer us. Again, there is a link at "Third Assignment". It will help you alot. Also, this link http://www.soyouwanna.com/site/pros_cons/gaymarriage/gaymarriage.html has both sides of the arguments. Happy reading and writing! Here's the topic:
Gay Marriage
Thesis Statements:
a. Granting legal marriage rights to gays and lesbians would threaten the stability of the family,
a pillar of our society.
b. Granting legal marriage rights under the law must extend to gays and lesbians to ensure that
all citizens enjoy full human rights.
Some of the issues in this argument:
- Should society encourage traditional values and traditional forms of family life?
- Should employee benefits be offered to people with domestic partners?
- Should we tolerate discrimination against gays and lesbians in employment or housing?
- Should our government enact legislation to strengthen and support traditional families -- like a constitutional amendment defining marriage as a union between a man and a woman?
- Should we provide the same rights to gay and lesbian couples that are currently only afforded to heterosexual couples -- the right to marry, adopt and receive benefits?
posted by scorpioneo at 9:41 PM
5 Comments:
Marriage by definition is union between a man and a women to become husband and wife. While gay marriage means union between same-sex people. I do agree that granting legal marriage rights to gays and lesbians would threaten the stability of the family, a pillar of our society. For me, this kind of marriage is immoral and absurd. Gays and lesbians cannot pro-create and they can't provide new generation. Besides, in society people cannot accept this kind of relationship because it is against traditional values. Gays and lesbians will be insulted by society. Some people says that same-sex marriage are not totally immoral. It is for sure that everyone have their rights. But it is illegal and it devalues the definition of marriage. So society have to encourage and support traditional values of family life.
12:15 AM
Well in my opinion,i agree that granting legal marriage rights to gays and lesbians would threaten the stability of the family, a pillar of our society.According to the oxford dictionary,marriage can be define as the joining of two people of opposite sex.That is a man and a woman.Eventhough same-sex couples are as likely as straight couples to live healthy, happy, well-adjusted lives, and provide a good environment in which to raise children(by adopting the child),but the process of upbringing them will definately are not going to be as same as what straight couples did.Think on the child side.One day he/she might asks questions such as where is he coming from?and why is that his family is different from others?.He or she might feel confused about himself/herself and feels belittled among his/her friends.Thus causing big impact for him/her physically and mentally.Furthermore.mother's love cannot be replace or change by a man!.
5:28 PM
“Each individual's journey through life is unique. Some will make this journey alone, others in loving relationships, maybe in marriage or other forms of commitment. We need to ponder our own choices and try to understand the choices of others. Love has many shapes and colors and is not finite. It can not be measured or defined in terms of sexual orientation.” That quotation is true that we need to ponder our own choices and try to understand the choices of other, but in my opinion, if we look from the basic of theology, same sex marriage is totally unacceptable because we can see that God creates men and women to be couples and make their cognations. Thus, with the existence of same sex marriage, what is the purpose of men and women created then? I believe that race, sex and sexual orientation must not affect the even application of civil rights, but I individually concern about our next generations that become far away from their creator.
1:54 AM
To yuss laaa,
I think you mean consequences for ‘consciences’. Your thesis statement is very clear. However, you will need more evidence to back your thesis statement. You have to have credible evidence to back your argument. Good try.
To muhammad51,
Well done! From your writing, I know that you have read the articles I told you to. Your argument is supported by good evidence. Keep it up! However, have to improve on the grammatical side J
To Sandra PM51,
You’ll have to back your argument with more supporting evidence (you can find it in the readings). However, you have string your ideas very well and you have stated your thesis statement very clearly.
To Yun Qin,
I tried posting my comments on your blog but I fail. There was an error page saying that they can’t excess to you blog. Nevertheless, I have sent an email to you stating my comments. Do check it out there.
To K@ngling,
I have posted my comments to your email. Do check you email and look at what I’ve commented. You have stated a very clear thesis statement and you have backed up your points well. However, there is still room for improvement in terms of sentence structure and grammar.
To Kar Yan,
I have posted comments to your email. Do check.
To Su Ling,
This is a wonderful piece. You have pieced up whatever you have read into a wonderful paragraph. BRAVO! Everyonen else, do have a look at Goh Su Ling’s paragraph. It’s superb. Keep it up!
To Mr Lee Zhen Yien PM45
You have stated a very clear thesis statement. However, you’ll need to back it up with reasons and evidence on why you agree with gay marriage. Look back at the readings in http://www.soyouwanna.com/site/pros_cons/gaymarriage/gaymarriage3.html
9:31 PM
To Asmah PM51,
You have chosen very suitable supporting details to support your topic sentence: "I do agree ……. (line 3-5). Just to remind…use the skill of paraphrasing.
To Katrina PM51
WELL DONE! You have organized your supporting details and chosen very relevant details to support your argument (topic sentence). A good example of an argument paragraph.
To Liyana PM51
"we should tolerate discrimination againts gays and lesbians in employment or housing" This statement would be "we should not tolerate discrimination against gays and lesbians in employment or housing" as your argument is against gay marriage. Very strong argument. Good try.
To Loh Ann Key PM45
Ann Key, to write an argument essay, always avoid using the phrase "in my opinion" as it weakens your argument. You must be assertive and aggressive and state your argument as a statement. However, you have written an organized paragraph with relevant supporting details to support your argument (topic sentence)
To Yellowletterpaper (anonymous),
As stated in Ann Keys, do avoid using the phrase "in my opinion".
Maslina PM45
Paraphrase J. The ideas would be fantastic if you have paraphrase. Nevertheless, the effect you put in to reading the websites is very admirable. Well done!
Melissa PM45
FANTASTIC argument! Great example. She has stringed her details very well to support her argument (topic sentence). A very exquisite argument indeed.
To Ying Hooi PM51
Your arguments are good but could be better if you have stronger points and evidence to support your argument (topic sentence). Why is it that gay marriages should be banned? Do some reading on the websites that I have provided. Arguments should be your opinions supported by relevant evidence to make your argument credible. Nevertheless, good try!
To Hazwanee PM45
Very impressive if only there's more paraphrasing done J
To Joanne,
Good argument with good supporting details to support. Good example…look at the way she stringed her points. However, plenty of room for improvement in term of grammar.
To munirah PM45
Points are very well organized. Well done!
To Christina Ann PM45
Well written and organized. Very straight to the point. Good try.
To Jing Yi PM47,
Jing Yi has written a good concession and refutation paragraph. Class, take note.
To Yollah PM51
Yollah has written a great argument paragraph. Take note of how she presents each relevant support detail (evidence) to support her argument (topic sentence). Class, this is a very good example of an argument body paragraph. Do take note and learn from it. Well done Yollah.
To Nurul Akbar PM47
Well written piece. Nevertheless, it will be much greater with if it's paraphrased.
To Angie PM51
You have not include any relevant evidence to support your argument which is you agree to legalizing gay marriage. Need to include relevant opinions. You have only stated general facts on the status of legalizing gay marriages in certain states in America and not details that would support your argument.
To Suzanna PM51
Well written! You have done your reading. Nevertheless, have you paraphrased?
To Izat PM45
Very interesting way to write your argument. Good try! Very well written.
To Diyana PM51
Your points are relevant. Nevertheless, it's not very well organized. You will have to focus on exactly what you want to argue about and what are your supporting details.
Nevertheless, the example given regarding the amazing race is a very good way of supporting your argument.
To Nurul PM51
You will have to omit the exclamation marks on your sentences. It's quite ok to use it once or twice in an essay but overusing it will kill the effect that you actually want to make, which is to stress a point. Nevertheless, you have written your argument (topic sentence) very clearly. The only setback is lack of relevant supporting details to support your argument. You have only included your point of view regarding the topic. An argument essay should include your point of view on the topic and then you will have to back it up with relevant details and evidence to make it credible as facts can be verified while opinions are mainly one's opinion.
1:00 PM
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